Amanda Rivers_Peer review

Allison Shulman

The documents that were in the folder were an Artist Statement, Seeking a letter of Recommendation, and the cover letter. These documents were well written. 

Andrew 

The documents submitted were the cover letter, and a letter of recommendation

Carrie

The documents included were the Artist statement, biography, cover letter, letter of seeking and resume Her Artist Statements are well articulated. Carrie’s cover letter looks professional and clean, but I would try to keep it to just a page. The resume looked organized and professional. 

Crystal 

Christine 

The documents that were in the folder was a Cover letter, Artist Statement, Seeking letter, and Biography. The wording of the cover letter sounds good but I would indent the paragraphs and also shorten the amount of space between the header and the date at the top of the page. 

Evelyn

The documents includes the Biography, cover letter, Art statements, and resume. I would make the biography a bit longer. The cover letter looks organized and professional. Resume is organized and i like the stylization. It makes it unique but maintains a professional appearance.

Hunter

The documents that were in the folder were the Resume, Biography, and short artist statement. I would write out biography completely instead of writing “bio”. 

Jaclyn

The documents included were the Biography, Cover letter, Letter of Recommendation, Letter of reference, resume and artist statements. The cover letter and artists statements are well written.

Jaqui

The documents in the folder were the Artist statement, Resume, Biography, Cover letter, Letter of Reference, and Artist Statement. 

Julia

The documents included were the Resume, Biography, Letter of recommendation, Artist Statements, and seeking letter. I would try to keep the Biography to two paragraphs, so it does not seem as separated. I like how you address societal and also the medieval outlook on mental health in you artist statement. 

Kayleah

In the folder there was a Cover Letter, Resume, Artist Statements, Biography, and Seeking letters. The artist statements could have more overlapping information. The resume looks good; I like the bold accents. It is organized well.  

Kim

The documents in the folder was the Cover Letter, seeking letter, biography, Artist Statements, and CV. The resume looks well organised and in a good order with education going first. The long artist statement is a little long.

Nick  

Rook

Vincent

The documents in the folder was the Cover Letter, Biography, Artist Statement, Resume, and Seeking letter. I would put your name in the header of the cover letter but other than that I think it looks great.

JuliaLauer_PeerReview

I am going to be updating this as I go, but I figured I could post it and continually update. I will be going alphabetically. My current complete list includes Kayleah, Hunter, Jaclyn and Christal.

Aldrich, Kayleah A.

  • Like a few other people have commented on, try to make sure your headers are unified, you seem to have the same information, but the formatting and organization is different. I’m personally against including your actual address in headers, most people will not need to know this and it is a privacy concern. Just include your city.
  • In your Long Artist statement, in the first sentence, consider the Oxford comma, I’m not sure it is necessary here. Just nitpicking. Additionally, in “I begin my pieces by mixing pigments, in a trance-like ritual before I begin the act of creating,” everything after ritual is unnecessary and repetitive.
  • In your Short Artist Statement, this sentence is passive “Including elements of distortion in comfortable, domestic environments, my work emits a surrealist sense by incorporating surprising oddities placed within the familiar.” Consider starting it with My work emits…
  • In your resume, just say Alfred, NY for the VersoRecto exchange, no one outside of Alfred will understand what Harder Hall is. You can just say Alfred University.
  • With your Seeking Recommendations letter, avoid using “me” and use more direct communication of plans. Avoid contractions in official documents. If you’re ever struggling with writing concisely, focus on the crucial words that are most important to understanding your point. The word “can” is also passive, use things like “I will”

I really like your font choice for your website, it feels professional. If you are using studio photos, however, consider color-correcting and taking higher quality photos, especially for an official site. You can also combine both your Contact pages into one, and add a little text outside of the basic information.

Great choice in adding detail photographs to your artwork entries, the blog format actually works for you here, because it creates a singular page for each piece.

Cady, Hunter L.

  • In your bio, try to switch between using “he,” as well as Hunter, and Cady. Switch it up. How was clay a part of your life, why is it important?
  • Resume – make sure your headers are the same across your documents. Additionally, put a space after your -‘s, it looks more professional. Try to make sure your spacing is consistent and equal, it seems a little all over the place.
  • Short Artist Statement – “An array of endless opportunities within any realm of questions is what drives my practice” feels fragmented, consider revising, and try to be more assertive. Think “My practice is driven by…” From what I see, your writing is closer to poetic format than formal writing, which isn’t a bad thing, but switch it up. Start some sentences with a direct “I” or “Cady/Hunter” instead of focusing on the topic of the sentence, focus on the who.
  • Long Artist Statement, Cover Letters and Recommendation Requests are missing, so I can’t help you there. I couldn’t find a website either, correct me if I am wrong.

Chen, Christal

  • Please try to organize your files in folders, I can’t really tell what are your older versions and your final files. I’m going to guess, though.
  • “State” should be capitalized in your bio, and try to use different words outside of “exhibited.” It is wise to include the title of any show you are a part of (ie: Fresh Meet)
  • For your letter of recommendation request, you may want to delve into why you love art, instead of simply stating that as a fact. For example, why is it important to you, and why will you study hard at RISD?
  • In your resume, make sure all your sections (ie: Skills) are formatted in the same manner, to define the break. In your exhibitions, I’m not sure why the location is on the next line, try to keep it concise and singular.
  • On your website, I recommend a dual-language function, especially if it is a part of your art practice. Additionally, work on getting tabs instead of a massive scroll down to find out more information. On a side note, oh my gosh, I saw some of your work awhile ago and I didn’t know it was yours, but your charcoal work and drawings are exquisite!
  • Did not see the rest of your files. Apologies.

Doyle, Jaclyn V. 

  • I like your website so far! I definitely think it could use some more work, but the tabs with your work are easy to read and access. On your Contact page, I’m not sure how I feel about that photo, it feels blurry and unclear. Additionally, I would include something more (ie: text) on your homepage to introduce and welcome viewers.
  • In terms of correctly labeling your documents, they are labeled with the right information, but I believe Caitlin wanted the underscores (aka: 2019_JaclynDoyle_ArtistBio)
  • In your Artist Bio, you don’t need a hyphen between works toward. Where is Chautauqua Institution? Additionally, in the last sentence, you should probably reword it, as it isn’t entirely complete. I suggest “Her interests include travel… etc.”
  • In your Cover Letter, it feels like it’s worded more like a request for recommendation, maybe it is mislabeled? On that note, your request for recommendation and reference are the exact same, but your formatting is the only difference (ie: your border spacing).
  • I’m not sure that the Artist Statement was supposed to be directed towards a singular piece, but rather your entire art practice. Additionally, “Inspired by my hometown of Mayville, NY” might sound a little less awkward (in my opinion.) Instead of saying how your choice of scale was your only option, focus on why you chose that scale. Saying “my only option” sounds unprofessional. Also, what is yupo paper?
  • Oh hey, I’m not the only facepainter here! That’s super cool. Try to figure out how to either expand on your resume to fill up the two pages better, or cut it down to fit on one page. Additionally, there doesn’t feel like there’s much of a separation between sections, outside of the obvious capitalization, etc.
Doyle, Jaclyn V.
Dugan, Carrie E.
Hyde, Rooke
Lauer, Julia
I don’t feel the need to critique myself now, I already do that every day!
Mejia, Jaqueline L.
Raposas, Christine E.
Rivers, Amanda M.
Shulman, Allison M.
Tamplain, Vincent P.
Varlan, Evelyn G.
Willcox, Kimberly E.
Wrobleski, Nicholas J.
Yohn, Andrew
  • Did your peer follow the assignment exactly (document labels)?
  • Can you find contact information (name at least), for your peer both on the document label and within each document?
  • Can you tell what you are reading- is it labelled if unclear (artist statement, bio etc)
  • How do all of these documents look together? Is there consistency between the documents in terms of font and font size?
  • On the artist resume / cv, is there consistency in how the information is spelled out (year, title, location)?
  • In all of the documents, are the organizations that your peer has been a part of listed correctly and completely? Are the locations of these places obvious to all readers?
  • How is the formatting?
  • are there any typos, corrections or suggestions you can make to improve the content?
  • Websites: is the information clearly laid out? What critique do you have?

Last, write a small critique to each of your peers giving them at least 2 improvements you think they can make, and 2 things you feel they did really well. If you have more to add to that- go for it.

Amanda Rivers_Cover Letters

Amanda Rivers       5 Cherry street, Sidney, NY     amandaxrivers98@gmail.com       11/6/19

Ken Marchione

Interim Dean of the School of Art & Design

Conte Administration Building

kmarchi@mwpai.edu

I am applying for the visualization and representation position At Munson Williams Proctor. I currently have a master’s degree in Art and design. I completed the two-year program at Pratt Munson Williams Proctor Institute in Utica, New York and completed my bachelors in Art and Design at New York State College of Ceramics at Alfred University in Alfred, New York. After completing my bachelors I went on and completed my masters at New York State College of Ceramics at Alfred University in Alfred, New York. I specialize in painting and drawing, I often work with charcoal, oil paint, collage materials, and found materials.

I am confident in my abilities and feel I will be a great fit in this role. I have the history in the area and ties to the Munson William Proctor facility already and look forward to being able to work with such a wonderful organization. 

Attached to this document are my resume, biography, and artist statement. 

 Thank you for your consideration. 

Amanda Rivers


Amanda Rivers_Seeking letter

Amanda Rivers 5 Cherry st, Sidney, NY Amandaxrivers98@gmail.com

Claudine Metrick

cmetrick@hotmail.com

Dear Claudine Metrick;

I hope this finds you well and the school year has started off well. I have had several new opportunities here at Alfred University. I will be applying for the APEX scholarship through Alfred University. With this scholarship, I plan to study abroad in Düsseldorf, Germany. This program is focused on painting, drawing and exploring contemporary art. Through this trip, I will be able to visit many different museums and see Europe’s contemporary art climate. 

Through your classes and the time I spent at PrattMWP I value your opinion and experience that you shared, I learned a lot. Your lessons and assistance have helped me greatly.   I would appreciate it if you would write a letter of recommendation letter for this scholarship application. I would need this letter by January 10th. I will need the letter sent to 

cooperkm@alfred.edu.

Warm Regards,

Amanda Rivers


Christine Raposas_ Peer Review

Kayleah Aldrich:

Contact information is easy to find and documents are well labeled and consistent. Your artist statement is really well written and describes your art well. All of your documents look professional. Your website interesting to look at and I liked the photos of your work.

Jaclyn Doyle

Your contact information and headings are easy to find and consistent throughout your documents. Your formatting is very clean. I loved your website! The colors and movement on the home page are beautiful. I also like that you separated the photos of your art into multiple categories.

Carrie Dugan

You labelled your documents well and your contact information and headings are consistent. Your information on your resume is displayed in an easy to read way and I like your use of color. Your website is very professional, and your social media is easy to find on it. I also like how large the photos of your art are.

Julia Lauer

Your documents are all labelled consistently, and your contact information is easy to find. Your artist statement is very well written, and I can picture your art when I read it. I love the colors on your website and it is very professional looking. You have so many photos of your work and I like that they are separated into multiple categories. 

Jaqueline Mejia

Your documents aren’t in a folder, but they are well labelled. Your contact information is not consistent or not present on some documents. Your fonts are consistent throughout the documents. I liked your website and how easy to access your social media is. 

Amanda Rivers

Your documents are consistent and look professional. Some documents didn’t have contact information or a heading on them. I liked your website! It is simple and easy to navigate, and I liked the photos of your art.

Allison Shulman

All of your documents look very professional and have the same heading and contact information on them. The spacing is different between some documents. I didn’t see your website on the blog.

Vincent Tamplain: 

Contact information is consistent and easy to see. The same font and spacing is used in all the documents, but the size is different throughout the documents. Your writing is very professional in all the documents and your artist statement is very well written. I loved your website! The close-up photo on your home page is beautiful.

Evelyn Varian

Your documents are consistent in font and mostly size. On some documents, there is no contact information. I liked the color you added on your resume! The colors in your art make your website bright and fun to look at. I would maybe add a photo of your art to the homepage, because it looks a little empty.

Kimberly Wilcox

Your documents are consistent in font, size, and contact information. They all look very professional. I love your website! I like that there are photos of your work in every tab and its very well done overall.  Everything is so clean and I like the colors you used.

Andrew Yohn

Your contact information is pretty consistent on all documents except for your artist statement. Not all documents are in the file, but the ones there are well done! Your writing is professional and clean. I couldn’t find your website. 

Evelyn Varlan_ Peer Review

Aldrich, Kayleah A.
Improvements: Some of your Documents had slightly different
formatting (ex. font color and line spacing), For your website, I would go through and try to make the sizes of your ceramic photos more consistent and chaotic.

Strengths: Consistent headings with easy to find contact information,
a great professional voice in all documents.

Cady, Hunter L.
Chen, Weitong (Christal)
Improvements: I’m not sure if this is an issue with formatting on my end but it seems like some of your documents like your resume are set to strange page size, I would recommend writing the letter of recommendation request to an actual professor even if you never ask the person. then you will be more able to personalize the letter to that professor.

Strengths: consistency in font and formating through all of your
documents, Your website looks well organized and the pictures are formated very nicely.

Doyle, Jaclyn V.
Improvements: Try to find a way where you can shorten your resume to strictly one page instead of having only three lines roll onto the second page. Your short artist statement still has red “-” marks in it from the
editing process.

Strengths: Your Headings are consistent and make it easy for the reader
to find all of your information and all your documents look like they go together, Your Website is well-formatted and I appreciate that you gave each of your mediums their own space.
Dugan, Carrie E.
Improvements: Your resume has a few weird formating things where some of the years are out of line and there is an out of place bullet point at
the end of the line about your cohen internship. Labeling the long and short artist statement within the document look a little awkward in the
context of all the rest of your documents

Strengths: the heading to all of your documents aesthetically pleasing a well as easy to read. All files correctly formatted and appropriately
named.
Hyde, Rooke
Lauer, Julia
Improvements: The headings on some of your documents are inconsistent with three different versions. Your cover letter still has some red marks from the editing process.

Strengths: Your website has a lot of well-documented pieces on with a large variety of work, Your resume is well-formatted and it’s easy to read
and locate information.
Mejia, Jaqueline L.
Improvements: Your documents have inconsistent heading making it hard to relate them to each other. At the bottom of your short artist statement, there is a weird line that isn’t found in any of your other documents.

Strengths: besides the heading, all of your documents have the same formating. The works on your website are well documented and your website is visually appealing.
Raposas, Christine E.
improvements: None of your documents were in the correct PDF format. Your cover letter and seeking reference letter still have some red marks
from the editing process.

Strengths: All of your documents are professional looking and clean. All documents have similar formating as far as font and spacing.
Rivers, Amanda M.
Improvement: None of your files were uploaded in the correct PDF
format. there are quite a few spelling errors throughout your resume. Some documents had different spacing than others.
Strength: All Documents were written with the same font. Your website is visually appealing and easy to navigate.
Shulman, Allison M.
Improvements: Some of your documents have different line spacing than others. Your Short and long artist statements should be put in different
documents.

Strength: Formatting looks really professional. All contact information is easily accessible.
Tamplain, Vincent P.
Improvements: A lot of your documents have different fonts and font sizes from each other, I would go through and uniform the formatting of your documents.

Strengths: You do a really great job of talking about your work and explaining your ideas. your headings are very cohesive
Varlan, Evelyn G.
Willcox, Kimberly E.
Improvements: The main page of your website was a little overwhelming to me.

Strengths: your documents look professional and cohesive.
Wrobleski, Nicholas J.
Yohn, Andrew
Improvements: I would re-upload your files in the proper Pdf format and upload your short and long artist statements as separate files. Make the headings to all of your documents in one uniform format.

Strengths: Your writing is professional and easy to comprehend.

VincentTamplain_PeerReview

Final Documents:

Kayleah Aldrich

  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • Formatting is incredibly consistent
  • Resume can be rearranged to put bulk of experiences in one spot. Otherwise, nice resume!
  • The website looks great. The cover page looks clean and professional. I would try to find a consistent image size. This would tidy the site up even more.

Hunter Cady

  • No documents. No website.

Weitong Chen

  • Documents have not been uploaded, but the content can be found on her website. What I could navigate of the site is nice. The formatting and simple and consistent. It seems the content for the documents is prepare, just needs to be uploaded!

Jaclyn Doyle

  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • Formatting is consistent
  • Watch minor formatting in resume. Keep consistent with headings (italicized or not). I think having them all not italicized would work strongest.
  • The moving Cover Page is a nice touch. I didn’t download your Artist Statement or Resume from your site (I typically wouldn’t if I was just browsing the internet). I would upload the content directly to site. Your headers show a good versatility in the mediums you work in. I think this is a strong addition. The consistency in image sizes and simplicity of the site makes it easy to navigate.

Carrie Dugan

  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • Your headers are nice. The little touch of color is a nice touch. I think blue is a neutral choice that would work better than others (such as red, etc.).
  • Formatting of documents is incredibly consistent and upholds a professional tone.
  • You have a clear focus on the content you want to portray and the way you like to work. Be sure to fill out your resume on your website, if not, make an Events/Exhibitions page if that is all you choose to list.
  • Also, Caitlin suggested not having a Contact Me section. It’s not jarring in anyway, ust worth considering omitting.

Rooke Hyde

  • No documents yet. Website is nice and simply formatted. The structure compliments the work.

Julia Lauer

  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • The formatting of your contact information is inconsistent. The information needed is there, just stay consistent. The asterix are not working for me. This could just be personal preference. Try something that sits centered on the line. Such as bullets or dashes. Maybe just a space.
  • Add a little more to post grad plans in the Bio. This will make the document look more balanced and not leave the reader on a one sentence paragraph. It seems like you ran out of things to say.
  • The color palette of the website is nice. There’s plenty of soft colors. They aren’t overwhelming but create an atmosphere within the site. Pay attention to the empty space on the cover of your site. Empty space isn’t bad if it is used well, but currently, I think the format can be modified.

Jaqueline Mejia

  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • Formatting seems consistent. The content is a bit tight. This might be an attribute of the small text.
  • Website is nicely done. I like the font and it fits the work. Be mindful of Caitlin’s recommendation to not have a contact form on your site. This creates more headache than opportunity. You will get more spam than anything on the contact survey. If someone’s really interested, they will use your contact information.

Christine Raposas

  • Inconsistent and many missing parts. I know Christine makes nice and clean work and would love to see the documents to support this. A website as well!

Amanda Rivers

  • Documents are all jumbled and may not all be present. It is difficult to tell. I also had difficulties accessing the site. The link provided did not work.

Allison Shulman

  • Yes
  • Yes
  • Yes
  • Yes
  • Some basic inconsistencies in formatting, such as the font changes size in letter of recommendation
  • The content was good and all present
  • No website

Evelyn Varlan

  • The formatting and contact information headers are all different. No titles on documents.
  • The content itself is all there
  • I would love to see the tone of your website match the strong moods carried in the content of your work. If your website could have sinister, erotic undertones. The contents of your work would snuggle in to create an overall cohesive effect. Your Cover page on your site is week. Try adding one of your photos as the background or little more content. Also, try reformatting the Contact portion of your site. It has room to look more professional.

Kim Wilcox

  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • yes
  • I can feel the sense of experience help within the documents and website. Good, clean and consistent formatting. No complaints.
  • The website is clean and can be navigated with ease. The Let’s Chat is a neat quick contact feature. With the shop, it I nice that you have it, but have something to sell or remove it for now. I know when I had an empty shop, it became a weight that loomed heavily over me.

Nick Wrobleski

  • No documents. No website.

Andrew Yohn

  • Not all documents are present or in final folder. No website.

.